Hunt for the infernal beast – Pt 2

Young lord, sat on his palfrey with his fancy clothes, never hunted anything bigger than foxes, probably had his lord father’s bloodhounds doing the killing.

I would’ve found the beast by now, set up traps for it. There’s no use charging it head on, I told them, be suicide. Dung I saw means it’s big. They didn’t listen to me, no.

I’ll stay at the back.

There’s Baron Delmont’s squire, giggling, deranged. I’ll keep out of his way as well.

Oh, look, young lord’s raising his hand, thinking he saw something.

Oh…

…fuck, he did!

It’s there!

Fuck!

OH FUCK!

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35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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21 Responses to Hunt for the infernal beast – Pt 2

  1. Pingback: Hunt for the infernal beast – Pt 2 | Blog of the imaginator | Voice Week HQ

  2. Here’s someone lower in society, but obviously a much better hunter. He resents having to follow these noble fools, but such is life…or, in this case, possibly death? Hopefully not. : )

  3. Both voices are distinct. I like the similar writing structure to the two pieces and how it sort of makes it more like viewing the same picture from opposite sides of the room.

  4. Carrie says:

    a, the lowly peasant who knows more about the woods than the upper echelons 🙂

  5. Great ending. You know it’s serious when the cool-headed, intelligent voice starts to panic.

    Can’t wait for the rest of this story!

  6. Evan says:

    I loved the cool, quiet confidence this guy had. So much fun to watch it shatter 😉 Great job!

  7. Tara R. says:

    At least someone is suitable worried.

  8. Older and a little bit arrogant; I like his surprise that the young lord actually did see something. This voice really has character.

    Nice job paralleling this part with the previous!

  9. elmowrites says:

    Great job with this scathing older guy, clearly has no respect for his young master. He’s also clearly not the expert he thinks he is, given that reaction. A good strong voice.

  10. Parul says:

    Ah! A more able albeit less fortunate mortal, dismissing the ones high above for their ineptitude at the undeserving higher pedestal. Very interesting voice…

  11. I love this! You can totally hear the class difference, which also reveals more about the setting. This voice seems wise but maybe a little jaded. I also love how your installments end with action and profanity! Makes me want to read more.

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