The Ferry

Deck of ferry

Copyright – Ted Strutz

It was eerie, that silence.

The sun had barely risen from its bed, only now rousing itself and spreading its wings across the horizon, casting a ghostly pallor over the vast lake.Β  In the dimness of this eldritch glow the ferry glided quietly, the only sound the rush of water surging past the bow and around the vessel.

It was like a floating tomb.

This was fitting, I thought, as one by one I took up the heavy black plastic sacks, heaved them up to the rail and pushed them overboard, listening as each one fell with a satisfying splash.


About TheImaginator

35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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49 Responses to The Ferry

  1. Dear Imaginator,

    Floating tomb indeed. You set the tone and then delivered the bodies in the most literal sense. Thanks for teaching me a new word “eldritch.” Good job.



  2. jwdwrites says:

    Eldritch was new to me too. A very stylish story and a satisfying read. πŸ™‚

  3. Beautifully crafted horror story. The horror hidden in the beauty of your prose. Well done.

  4. Terrific piece of writing, love it.

  5. Dayum, what he do, kill the whole crew?

  6. Adam Ickes says:

    It seems murder is the theme of the day, but when isn’t it with this bunch?

  7. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Imaginator,

    Sounded like Dexter rides the Ferry. Who’s at the helm? Good story, sir.



  8. Steve Lakey says:

    Love the creepy atmosphere you set up with this, and the ending doesn’t disappoint!

  9. Mike says:

    A great story. Loved the matter of fact, creepy ending.

  10. helenmidgley says:

    So creepy, great job πŸ™‚

  11. Jan Brown says:

    Good one! Great writing, and a nice, grisly twist at the end:-)

  12. This makes me wonder what sort of thing happened. Would a mass murderer really bag all the bodies and clean up the scene? If not, was this a plague? Very beautiful writing, in any case.

  13. Anja says:

    I was drawn in with such a beautiful description then hit with reality of what is really going on. Wonderful!

  14. Oy! An awful lot creepy crawly characters this week! The idea of all those dead folks on the boat, and the killer tossing them over… Yowza!

  15. Ye Pirate says:

    “This was fitting, I thought” !! Very nicely done! He has an interesting career, in his organisation…!

  16. kbnelson says:

    Remind me to never go on a ship with you. Creepy…and I loved it!

  17. tedstrutz says:

    Oh, this is a sweet one!

  18. unspywriter says:

    Oy! I was thinking “how pretty” then came the black bags line…loved it! You’ll find mine maybe a bit related:

  19. I’m never riding a ferry because of you!

  20. K.D. McCrite says:

    Some great writing here. Vivid imagery that does not compromise story.

  21. elmowrites says:

    A little heavy on the description in the first half for me, but then the story creeps through in the second and opens up a whole world of possibilities

  22. Gives a really sinister tone if you say that someone was really cut up from a failed relationship.

  23. atrm61 says:

    Whoa-all of them-bagged?Loved this!:-)

  24. I enjoyed that both for it’s descriptive nature and also the fact that everyone assumes the sacks are filled with human remains. πŸ˜‰

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