Playing with fire

Maui from Mauna Kea

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

They had pushed nature too far this time.

Summoning great whorls of fire demons and unleashing them as a burning tempest, dragging vast rivers of lava from the bowels of the earth and raining it down upon their enemies; the pressure of it built up and became too great to control.

The volcano exploded above them with a deafening roar, the land heaved and shook, and lightning forked its way around plumes of black smoke which turned day to darkest night.

They all died screaming.

Afterwards the rains came, obscuring the immolation with a blanket of white clouds.

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About TheImaginator

35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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30 Responses to Playing with fire

  1. Dear Imaginator,

    Wow. Fabulous descriptions.
    If you don’t mind a bit of constructive crit, I think it would be stronger at the end if you took out hads and went with “They all died screaming.”
    “Afterwards the rains came…”
    A well constructed, if not disturbing, story nonetheless.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. what a way to go….

  3. Sandra says:

    Very graphic, well done.

  4. Arran Nachtigall says:

    Well then. That escalated quickly.

    Very well written, however.

  5. rckjones says:

    In my brain, this is about the extinction of the dinosaurs! :-p Awesome story, epic in scope.

  6. When I arrived and saw you sky-diving picture once again, I thought the prompt very apropos, but you took the story way elsewhere. Good job.

    janet

  7. Very visual. I had to close my eyes.

  8. Christopher Shawbell says:

    I really enjoyed your short. My mind was seeing a battle between Titans and Elemental Lords. It was a fun ride.

    ~Chris

  9. zookyworld says:

    Fantastically vivid descriptions to match the power of the action. I’d hate to be where a river of lava comes from the bowels of the Earth and rains down on me… don’t think my umbrella will help much.

  10. pattisj says:

    It’s not nice to fool with Mother Nature, pushing her limits! That’ll teach ’em a lesson. Nice work.

  11. neenslewy says:

    Fantastic description – especially in the end lines – harrowing conclusion – well written flash.

  12. troy P. says:

    So, not a happy story then, eh?
    Nicely done!

  13. Joe Owens says:

    I am sure the folks in Vesuvius experienced something like this.

  14. Linda Vernon says:

    They all died screaming! I like that you just came right out and said it. This was a really good little story.

  15. What a frightening image of power gone awry.

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