Foreign devils

Yu Zhen was not one of the prettiest girls aboard the Fēng kāihuā flower boat so was assigned the role of a serving girl, not one of the flower ladies who entertained the boorish foreign devils; thank the gods.

Such pigs; they ate, drank and smoked too much!

They wore thick woollen vestments ill-suited to humid summer weather.  They sweated a lot and seldom bathed their entire bodies, which meant they stank.  They cursed a lot in their crude tongue for they were hot, insect-bitten, drunk and irritable; they shouted at the girls, grabbing them and slapping their rears.

One night, to her shame, Yu Zhen lost her temper and slapped away the hand of one of the fat old devils; he bruised her eye with the back of his hand.

Little did he know she was an assassin; like the mosquitoes, her stiletto would taste devil blood that night.

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About TheImaginator

35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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16 Responses to Foreign devils

  1. oberon732013 says:

    Great piece, makes you think ‘yeah girl you go do him in’ I was taken by your language well done.

  2. Perfection in setting the scene; double perfection in the last line!

  3. One word – Brilliant.

  4. Great entry!! You captured that pointed glare in the one open eye so well….love how you pulled together such a culturally specific tale, with plot development and impending retribution — in under 150 words! Brilliant.

  5. I’m in agreement with all of the other comments. I’m glad you took the pov that she will be the powerful one and exact her revenge!

    (By the way, I am very pleased to see an actual face in your profile photo! Nice to meet you :)) Gosh, you’re a brave one doing the sky jumping!)

  6. Miriam E. says:

    oooh very nice twist at the end – a great write.

  7. Love it… I absolutely relish secret assassins…xx

  8. Not sure how you manage to set the scene and get the atmosphere right in so few words, excellent as usual.

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