Beast of the bay

Bay in Stockholm, Sweden

copyright – Managua Gunn

Back aching as much as her heels did, a dull throbbing permeated her bones as rivulets of sweat ran down her spine and between her ample breasts.

Hilde looked out across the bay.Β  Time seemed to pass so slowly as people strolled by, getting on with their lives.

She glanced up at the summer sun.Β  It was about 1pm; still hours to go.

Suddenly there was a roar from the water; people ran away screaming as tentacles emerged flailing about, coiling round three and dragging them under.

Eyes wide, Hilde took up her rifle and ran to engage the beast.

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About TheImaginator

35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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42 Responses to Beast of the bay

  1. misskzebra says:

    I wonder what she’d prefer, a boring shift, or one where she’s battling the beast?

  2. Hannah says:

    You have built up the story very nicely!

  3. Linda Vernon says:

    Ha! Loved it. That ought to make the time pass a little faster! ;D

  4. Excellent opening sentence and a surprise ending. Good stuff!

    janet

  5. what do you aim at first??

  6. wmqcolby says:

    You tapped into one of my guilty pleasures! Let’s get this story going with more! I want to see how it ends. Super!

  7. Haw haw; sod’s law πŸ˜‰

  8. I talked to my son today and he told me his 11 year old asked him to read Jaws. I think he would like this story better.

  9. Sandra says:

    Now that was a story that changed direction… and fast. Well done.

  10. Dear Imaginator,

    Just when you think it’s going to be another boring day, a monster pops up in the harbor. Nicely done, Sir.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. zookyworld says:

    What a thing to break up the monotony! A really enjoyable read.

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  13. F**king brilliant, darling! This was wonderful.

  14. Trudy says:

    Well I wasn’t expecting that! Really imaginative take πŸ™‚

  15. EagleAye says:

    Wow! This was a lot of fun. Winderfully imaginative, and it fits the prompt so well. Great concept and great writing!

  16. marymtf says:

    Yumm, calamari.
    That unexpected ending certainly had me sitting up and taking notice. πŸ™‚

  17. Lyn says:

    Oh I do love that you brought a monster into it to make Hilde’s day more exciting! Let’s hope she’s a good shot and that the gun isn’t purely ceremonial.
    When my 3 kids were little, we were constantly being attacked by Daleks. We solved the problem by building a brick fence and lots of stairs made from Selenium πŸ˜€

  18. unspywriter says:

    You go, Hilde! I have a feeling she’s just uncomfortable enough that the tentacled monster needs to watch out. Great job.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/the-unknown-soldier/

  19. Wonder if she becomes a hero or if so she got a fine for leaving her post

  20. Sarah Ann says:

    Love the slow start and dramatic change of pace in this.

  21. I guess they have to be ready for anything, although I’ll bet that wasn’t in the training manual.

  22. tedstrutz says:

    Anything to break up the routine… pretty cool story!

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