Sabbath

cemetery at night

cemetery at night (Photo credit: Jo Naylor)

The robed, hooded figures stood in a circle around a large fire in the kirkyard with their arms held out sideways, chanting unintelligible syllables in low, monotonous tones as their upper torsos swayed in the rhythm of their ecstasy.

Clouds parted to reveal bright moonlight which shone on the crepuscular figures as they chanted gradually more rapidly, more rapidly still, their bodies swaying faster and faster as their chants gradually became shrieks, louder and louder as the flames grew larger, rising far above their heads as the women chanted in husky, broken voices and the flames snapped like whips in the night, surging upwards as the fire rose in supplication to the darkness, chants became cries and moans filling the air…

Suddenly the women screamed in a fit of paroxysm as the fire exploded and roared into monstrous form, flinging them violently to the ground.

Their dark lord had arrived.

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About TheImaginator

35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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27 Responses to Sabbath

  1. As alway I want more, please.
    #atozchallenge
    maggie at expat brazil

  2. Draug419 says:

    hahahaha this reminds me of the end of Cabin in the Woods. Love it.

  3. I love it when then Devil actually arrives. Be careful what you call on ladies!

  4. Oh, beautifully done! This is so evocative and chilling!

  5. Maggie says:

    Great writing! Love the momentum you build. Creepy and fascinating.

  6. KymmInBarcelona says:

    *shivers*
    loved the image & the phrase: the flames snapped like whips in the night

  7. jannatwrites says:

    Kymm made my comment – I paused and re-read that line, too. Great descriptions!

  8. Crepuscular! Long time since I tasted that word. Great little vignette.

  9. kirkyard… love that. and the devil certainly made a grand entrance.

  10. Wow, this is so visual. Great job with the prompt.

  11. Silly people; they’re the first he’ll turn on – very good writing,you conjured him up well…!

  12. Well dono! As the chanting grew faster, I started reading faster. Love the climatic ending.

  13. kdillmanjones says:

    Oh wow, you ended it just as I was sucked in so totally. I can only imagine the rest myself. πŸ™‚ Well done.

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