The cat’s out of the bag

“We need to catch that thing, if it gets out and the press get wind of it…”

“I know I know, the cat’s out of the bag” interrupted Colin, looking guilty.

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The cat’s out of the bag – full version (333 words)

“Oh shit oh shit, we’re in trouble now man, where the fuck did it go?”

“I don’t know, did you see where it ran off to?”

Colin looked around the lab room quickly, eyes wide, breathing in rapid, shallow gasps.

“Probably went into the air ducts.”

Martin’s shoulders sank “great, that’s all we need. Was the thing tagged before it escaped?”

“Ahhhh, erm, well no, I didn’t have time…”

Martin grimaced, walked over to a locker and took out a pair of tranquillizer guns, tossed one to Colin.

“We’ll just have to do this the old fashioned way.  We need to catch that thing, if it gets out and the press get wind of it…”

“I know I know, the cat’s out of the bag” interrupted Colin, looking guilty.

Martin glared at Colin. “You have no frikkin’ idea.”

Colin stayed silent, looked down at his gun.

The two men checked that the guns contained some darts, then ventured out into the hallway, slowly so as to make as little sound as possible.  They felt quite vulnerable wearing only lab coats, both of them wished that researchers had access to armour of some kind.

Both men held their breath, listening out for the slightest sound.  As they walked, they shot glances at the air ducts overhead, and along the hallway.  They hugged the wall, Martin leading as they approached the corner of an L-shaped junction, saw the lights flickering there.  The tension in the air was palpable as Martin peered round the corner, gun raised to shoulder level ready to shoot.

The sickly sweet, cloying stench of blood hit his nostrils like a wave, and he gagged, covering his face with the sleeve of his lab coat.

The lights flickered – in a flash he saw a bloodied human corpse on the floor…the creature stood next to it, pulling intestines out with its teeth – darkness again.

Flicker – in a flash he saw the cat stood in front of him, face covered in blood, eyes shining.

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Update

Edited the 33 word version (roughly an hour after publishing) as it didn’t contain the idiom.  Removed photo of cat eating meat as it was superfluous.

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35 year old sciolist living in Tokyo. I like swing dancing, Twitter word games, writing, using Stumbleupon.com, reading, and watching movies. I write stuff on my blog occasionally.
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28 Responses to The cat’s out of the bag

  1. Interesting use of the prompt and the two versions.

  2. jannatwrites says:

    It’s not funny that there’s a deranged cat eating people, but it did make me chuckle that the cat let out of the bag was really a cat!

  3. tedstrutz says:

    What the Hell!!! Two versions??? I’m glad… great story! The hell with the Press… try Staying Alive… cat in a bag indeed. (Come to think of it… I used a cat too)

  4. Suzanne says:

    Frankenstein’s mog – I love that! Might even name my next cat that… This is a great story – I also like that the cat let out of the bag is really a cat!

  5. barbara says:

    SHOOT! no,, really, SHOOT!!! shivers

  6. Well done to you on both counts..bloody big cat by the sound of it! 🙂 I had the Movie Alien in my head..looking up at the air ducts. spoky 🙂

  7. Draug419 says:

    I bet the cat would make one hell of a mouser. Very spooky take on the prompt! I love both versions.

  8. Great story,., and good use of the 33 words

  9. Lumdog says:

    Great use of several idioms.

  10. Wow, the cat certainly is out of the bag! Good tale of horror.

  11. ann bennett says:

    hard to get more than whimsey in 33 words. Enjoyed both versions.

  12. atrm61 says:

    Yikes,the longer version put quite a different spin on the short tale & had me by the throat!Great take:-)

  13. I LOVE cats! … But even I find this rather chilling! Nicely done.

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